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He wears long sleaves at summers peak.
Dons a switchblade of two and half feet.
Here trods the boy who holds his head high.
Keeping his sanity till night is nigh.

The blood trickles down his muscular arms.
Oblivious is he, while the knife inflicts harm!
Dizzied and spinning in a tumult of terror.
Too late he finds his last cut was an error!

The carpets stained red from deep laceration.
He checked his cell phone, and filled with disposition
Not one person called for him that night.
It was a relived, animated, never ending blight.

A tunnel overtakes him, as he breathes his last.
A giant snake crushes his ribs and he thinks on his past.
He wonders how he got to be there.
In death he thought no more cares.

Suddenly the tunnel drained of  the crystal light.
He breifly forgot his caustropobia and blight.
Then the words were screched "welcome to Hell"
He found himself in damnation eternal.
©2006-2009 ~Bloodchild77
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I wrote this based off of a work of prose.. Yay. Hope you all enjoy this, critiques, as always, are most welcome.

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:iconfoxey-grl:
wow, this is awesome, after a while seeing the same rhyme gets to you, but the story is clear and cool. its a sad one, but i like it.

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So that is how I learned the lesson that everyones alone.
And your eyes must do some raining if you are ever gonna grow.
But when crying don't help and you can't compose yourself.
It is best to compose a poem, an honest verse of longing or simple song
:iconbloodchild77:
Thank you. As of late I enjoy writting a lot of sad poetry and prose. My heart weeps when I write it. That is why I enjoy it so! :heart:

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Lust and hot showers go hand in hand. Both are steamy and both can have another experiencing it with you.
:iconconcisecomplexity:
*sighs* I actually dislike the concept of cutting yourself. I think it's dumb. "O I'm sorry you're sad, but hurting yourself and marking the occasion is not going to help!!!! You don't like it then do something!!!!!"

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"Give me envy
Give me malice
Give me your attention."
~Time to Dance- Panic! at the Disco
:iconbloodchild77:
ha ha. i love you lizard! Blunt and to the point on everything, 'pecially your opinions! :heart: I don't like it, but I accept it. That is just how I am.

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Lust and hot showers go hand in hand. Both are steamy and both can have another experiencing it with you.
:iconconcisecomplexity:
Hey my best friend used to cut herself. I worry for her buit if that's the way she handles stress, that's going to have to be ok with me isn't it? But she has gotten better ever since invisible scarred. Kinda ironic!
In any case, i can't say I approve of it, but I'm not gonna think you're a sorry loser just because you cut yourself. And maybe this is the oppinion that I'm forcing upon myself to keep me from doing it. I dunno. My mind is a funny place.

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"Give me envy
Give me malice
Give me your attention."
~Time to Dance- Panic! at the Disco
:iconbloodchild77:
wait, do u think I cut myself? o.O or are you refering to Allan?

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Lust and hot showers go hand in hand. Both are steamy and both can have another experiencing it with you.
:iconfoxey-grl:
scary, but that made sense. o_O

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So that is how I learned the lesson that everyones alone.
And your eyes must do some raining if you are ever gonna grow.
But when crying don't help and you can't compose yourself.
It is best to compose a poem, an honest verse of longing or simple song
:iconconcisecomplexity:
Allan! :)

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"Give me envy
Give me malice
Give me your attention."
~Time to Dance- Panic! at the Disco
:iconbloodchild77:
yah... you got that. Though it wasn't hard to I guess. :heart: I wrote that the day he told me about it. He loved it.

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Lust and hot showers go hand in hand. Both are steamy and both can have another experiencing it with you.

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